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Undoubtedly, working for longer duration and getting limitied leisure time is affecting individuals globally. There are numerous reasons behind this, for instance, stress and anxiety to achieve the deadline, multiple jobs and many more. With this essay I will discuss all this with there possible solutions. Firstly, employees who are working at the higher positions like, managers or assistant managers fell more anxious due to their leadership roles. They are always in a rat race to meet the deadlines and to achieve the goal. These stressful conditions can lead to health issues. According to one the recent research, diabetics and hypertention are the two main diseases caused by stress 68% of the time, rest is genetic. Secondly, majority of individuals choose to work at to different jobs so that they can earn their bread and butter and raise their family. However, working day to night and staying away from family can be extremely hard and exhausting. Spending less time with the loved ones can disturb the family dynemics. For instance, in a current BBC article majority of the divorces are taking place as an outcome of spending less quality time. By fostering a collaborative environment we can create a winning formula. This include, mandatory leave every year, limited working hours weekly and set age for the retirement. For instance, international students are only allowed to work 24 hours per week by the government for thier well being. There should be a work life balance and to achieve that the employers should grant 2 week paid leave for all the workers annually. To summarize, By addressing the root causes like stress in leadership roles and multiple jobs at the same time and implementing the comprehensive solutions can lead to successfull outcome. Not only this, government should set a certain age of retirement, so that an individual spend rest of their life stress free.
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