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It is said that only authorities and large corporations are responsible for protecting the envinronment while the effort of regular people is inconsiderable and unimportant. I vehemently disagree with the view because citizens' pressure can force governments to regulate stricter laws to preserve the environment and the collective effort of each individual can accumulate into substantial changes. The primary reason why individuals' contributions are important is that the authorities cannot ignore citizens' voices. That is to say that when people are bounded together with the same purpose of protecting their planet, the pressure and protests from them will force the government to implement new regulations to prevent industries from polluting the ecosystem. A practical example of this can be seen in Vietnam, where its people protested against a company called Formosa for severely damaging the river and canals around the area, and this obliged the authority to shut down the business, bringing back the natural resouces to the residents. Another reason why the role of the regular people cannot be downplayed is that the collective effort of each individual can result in significant changes on a large scale. This is because when each person is well aware of how their activities can impact the environment, a huge amount of plastic and trash will be reduced and recycled every year and this can set a positive figure for others to follow. For instance, Japanese people are famously known for their attitude to preserving the country's street. This not only makes it one of the cleanest nations in the world but also sets an example of how people can improve their own neighbourhood without depending on the government. In conclusion, the collective effort of individuals is imperative in improving the natural world in which we are thriving because not only it can change the system behind the negative patterns but also influence and spread the positive virtues that encourage others to follow.
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